when ed and eduardo meets itchy and charlie
Author : edd
Date sent : November 11, 2011
Rating : PG-13 (Parents strongly cautioned)
Description : this is how they meet
Length : Very short -
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Date sent : November 11, 2011
Rating : PG-13 (Parents strongly cautioned)
Description : this is how they meet
Length : Very short -
Characters :
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1. There are no paragraphs, it's just one big text wall mess that hurts my eyes to read.
2. No capitalization to tell when it's the start of a sentence or a character name.
3. Spelling... It just needs work...
4. No punctuation whatsoever. Add it. A LOT of it.
Work at it. This needs a complete overhaul to even be called written language. A text wall with everything mingling together is not even close to a fan fic. Also, lose the swearing, and don't try to say the bleeped out words isn't swearing, because if it has to be bleeped it is. This is advice not only to this fic, but to every one you've written and probably will write.