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| July 29, 2013 | ||
Yeah Faline's too bubbly to really hurt anyone. ![]() |
| July 29, 2013 | ||
Thanks, and thanks for the tip ![]() |
| July 29, 2013 | ||
Now, it's good, but I do have a bit of criticism - mostly, Faline. I
can understand that she wouldn't like Bambi's friends, and be cold to
them, but physical violence seems like something her character is
incapable of - this is a really common phenomenon, really, and
actually a bit difficult to avoid, especially when writing a different
character as Bambi's love interest - it's called "Character
Derailment." Just a warning, but other than that, which is nitpicking,
it's good. ![]() |